Passive Voice versus Passive Verbs
You may have heard of the great advice to get rid of the extra “to be” verbs as you self-edit. I concur with that task. Not only is it boring for the reader, but using passive verbs makes your writing weak. That’s why they’re termed…well…passive verbs.
However, contrary to what some people believe, every use of “was”—or another form of the verb “to be”—is not inherently using the passive voice. “Was” is the legitimate past tense of “to be” and in many cases is 100% correct. Unfortunately, some people who call themselves editors don’t recognize the difference and ruthlessly edit out every instance of “was” in a manuscript.
These are legitimate, correct uses of the past tense of “to be” (although in the last one, you could get rid of the “to be” helper verb and just write “waited”):
The sky was blue.
The man was tall.
Emily was waiting on the corner.
The passive voice—which is very different from a passive verb—happens when the action is happening to something rather than the main noun actively acting.
This is passive voice: “It was determined by the gang that the gold was real.”
The subject is weak and indeterminate. Two actors, the gang and the gold, are vying for the lead role here, but “the gang” is the true bearer of the news about the gold. Placing the active subject (the gang) at the beginning of the sentence makes the sentence robust and puts the emphasis on a stronger, more descriptive verb, “to determine,” instead of the weak “to be”: “The gang determined that the gold was real.”
There are legitimate uses for passive voice. Governments and other large entities (along with politicians and journalists) sometimes use it to deflect blame (but I’m not sure those are “legitimate”). 🙂 And sometimes, the passive voice is a political instrument:
“I acknowledge that mistakes were made.” –Atty. Gen. Alberto Gonzales. Active voice would be: “I acknowledge that I made mistakes.”
In a book I’ve been editing for the past year (developmental editing), the author and I decided that one weaselly politician’s speeches would be filled with passive voice. His personal, non-acting voice is not passive. It’s a show designed to soothe the masses. 🙂
Passive voice was also frequently used in research reports, but the scientific community has been moving away from that: “The subject was then moved to the OR, where their spleen was removed” versus “We moved the subject to the OR, where we removed their spleen.”
Do you have the habit of writing passively without even knowing it?
We’re Dun for today, so keep on Writin’!
Next week we’ll discuss ‘Using the Wrong Song Lyrics’
Susan
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I am the worlds worst for my over use of ‘was’, and have recently discovered that I use ‘but’ far too often too. What are we like?
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An overuse of “was” can highlight a tendency to tell, rather than show. 😦 You could look up articles on that issue, or ask a critique circle or *cough* an editor friend for examples of how to write things differently… 😀
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I think I do need to find a critique circle…
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Reblogged this on anita dawes and jaye marie.
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Thanks for sharing, Jaye 😀
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Thanks for sharing! 🙂
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Passive voice is really a tricky matter. Thanks so much for this clarification 🙂
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You’re welcome, and thanks for reading and leaving a comment! 😀
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I enjoyed how you also pointed out the uses of passivity, such as how you’re using it for the politician’s speeches!
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Thanks! I had to look up “weaselly” again, though, because, darn it, it just looks WRONG! But it is spelled correctly.
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Thank you for pointing out that “was” as the past tense of “to be” isn’t the same as passive voice. I’ve had arguments about this!
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You’re welcome, Audrey! Editors have this argument frequently, too. Unfortunately, a few people who call themselves “editors” flag every instance of “was” as passive!!! That only fuels the fire. 😦
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One of the biggest problems with my writing, I can’t seem to recognize it as I am writing so I do a search for “ing” after I finish a chapter. That helps a bit .
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Great idea, Noelle! Sometimes it just isn’t worth interrupting your flow of writing to keep track of every little rule while you’re writing. But after, definitely!
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I am defensive and guilty of this, but you are right.
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Hahahaha! That’s ok. 😀
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While editing my latest book, I was active in my deletion of the passive 🙂 You’re right about it being a slippery little devil ~ just slides into our text while we blithely write on. I’m sure I’ll eventually find many that got away 🙂 Your posts are invaluable, Susan. Thank you ♥
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Lol! There’s just so much to keep track of! It’s impossible to remember it all while writing. ❤
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The same holds true for us plebes while editing! All hail the professional editors! Still waiting for you to publish that book, Susan 🙂 ❤
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Thanks for Wonderful article on writing and reblogging.
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Thank you! 😀
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Reblogged this on Didi Oviatt.
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Thanks for sharing, Didi 😀
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You’re welcome 🙂
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Thanks for sharing it! 😀
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Absolutely 🙂
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