Dun Writin’—Now Whut? A series by Susan Uttendorfsky – Owner of Adirondack Editing – (01 Introduction)

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Hello all you fans of The Story Reading Ape! Chris has invited me to host a weekly series on his blog: Dun Writin’—Now Whut?  (Just for the record and in all fairness to Susan, it was ME who wanted a snazzy title and much as it pained Susan’s Editorial heart and soul, I finally wore her down with suggested titles until she capitulated and agreed to this one TSRA)

For the first post, he asked me to introduce myself.

I’m a freelance copy editor living in upstate New York near the Adirondacks. I’ve been writing and editing for over thirty years, and freelancing for two years. I work almost exclusively with independent authors. A few submit their manuscripts to agents and publishers, but by the time they come to me, most have decided to self-publish.

So what are we going to talk about in this series? Chris and I are of the same mind when it comes to offering information to writers—we want you to learn how to be a good author. So I’ll be sharing wisdom on

  • Self-editing

  • Revising

  • English usage tips

  • Helpful resources

  • Hiring professionals

  • Creative writing skills

We might even incorporate some publishing, marketing, and author platform information. Because—if you haven’t figured this out already—writing the book is only half the battle! The other half is getting it published and then selling it. There’s many steps to incorporate in “Dun Writin’—Now Whut?”

Today we’re going to look at redundancies in writing. Writers can be so concerned about expressing themselves that they write it more than once, in different ways, to get the point across. These quick, off-the-cuff examples don’t represent great writing, but they’re based on actual editing customers’ writing. Can you spot the redundancies? Some are subtle.

  1. The dragon breathed in and out angrily, then shot out fire that swallowed up everything in sight – all of it.

  2. The tears ran down her cheeks, falling on the note. She sobbed. Would she ever see him again in her lifetime?

  3. The soldier ran his sword through his opponent. He pierced the man’s heart with his weapon. He killed him without hesitation.

In number one, the phrase “swallowed up everything” is pretty all encompassing, wouldn’t you say? So “in sight” and “all of it” are unnecessary.

In number two, what happens when you sob? Don’t tears run down your cheeks? Also, how else do tears run? Do tears ever run up your face? Gravity doesn’t work that way. These first two sentences might be rewritten this way: “She sobbed over the note” or “Her tears smudged the note’s writing.”

There’s also a very subtle redundancy in the question in number two. The words “ever,” “again,” and “lifetime” all point to the same circumstance, and two of the three can be deleted and the sentence reworked.

Number three is a clump of short sentences, each giving different details of the account. They could easily be wrangled into one smooth sentence, such as, “The soldier’s sword pierced the man’s heart without hesitation.”

We’re Dun for today, so keep on Writin’!


Susan Uttendorfsky

Owner, Adirondack Editing




51 thoughts on “Dun Writin’—Now Whut? A series by Susan Uttendorfsky – Owner of Adirondack Editing – (01 Introduction)

  1. Reblogged this on Pukah Works and commented:
    Last week we finished up the Reblog Monday series on marketing I found over on Chris The Story Reading Ape’s Blog. This week we’ll be starting an entirely new series on editing. Hope you enjoy, and thanks for the referral Chris and Susan.

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  2. “Everything” comprises “in sight” and “out of sight”, so “in sight” is a defining subset of “everything and hence is not redundant. On then other hand, had I written example 3, I think I would have thought seriously about tearing up whatever it was written on and taking a serious break.


  3. Great series…and I do like the title! I found the simple advise on redundancy very helpful. After popping over to your site, I am confident that we will be working together in the not too distant future. I’ll email you when I am ready.


  4. Well… I didn’t reread the whole article for errors, but the following did stand out to me as a mistake:

    “They could easily be wrangled into one smooth sentence, such as, ‘The soldier’s sword pierced the man’s heart without hesitation.’ ”

    As rewritten, it’s now the sword which doesn’t hesitate to pierce the man’s heart, not the soldier. So, unless this is a magical sword… oops.

    (Happens to all of us!)



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